Forever and beginnings of bad books

I know beginnings are hard. You’re trying to show the audience the world, the rules, the characters, their problems, the situation and the reason why we’re starting here, all while writing engaging prose that pulls the reader in with a new voice and a new perspective of a plot the first readers have no doubt seen dozens of that week.

It’s hard. I get it. But the first episode of Forever was perhaps the most heavy handed version of trying to braid all those strains together. The main character did mostly voice over about who he was and why he was here. Okay, I get that. When he dies in place A and comes back in place B, there needs to be some explanation. But that’s not what bothered me so much. It was how they gave us the character’s strengths and weaknesses, something that we, as an audience should be shown so we can tell if this is an unreliable narrator who oversells their abilities.

For 42 minutes, the character was *told* his strengths and weaknesses by the other characters as though he himself didn’t realize that he was the cleverest, smartest, most wounded, most tragic past character that ever charactered. I mean, seriously, it was Sherlock the immortal immortal rip off. We’re all so jaded we would have gotten enough of who was until you showed us who else he could be, but no. There was absolutely no trust that the audience would get it if it wasn’t

S-P-E-L-L-E-D O-U-T.

Argh. Don’t do that.

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